Boy Heroes Thesis

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The introduction include a good attention getter, and a lot of background information. The thesis statement tells that the essay is going to be about how the boy heroes had been part of the past, the present, and the future of Mexican history. However, even though the body paragraphs explain very well the role that the boy heroes had in the past, it is not very clear how did them affect or influence our future. Therefore, you might rewrite your thesis, so it fit better with the body paragraphs. Your topic sentences of each paragraph are well supported by background information such as names, ages, and dates, that can be proved. Because of that, I suggest to include a works cited page. I like how paragraph three is well balanced respective

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