Consider crafting a more conventional structure and script, less surreal and cerebral. Focus on one woman and his friendship with Ginsberg and Burroughs.
Keep visions only with Gerard.
Streamline script – try to write a script that is only 90 to 100 pages – to enhance pace. Just try this and seen how it works to tell this story. It’s very difficult to market a long script.
Right now, the readability of the script feels very challenging due to the structure and lack of real tension.
Pitch the story emphasizing how this script is different from other films and how it shows a new or original side of Jack that has not been told: his self-imposed exile.
There’s an ensemble cast with compelling characters that will attract talent. Jack